The Doormat (Haiku)

[Lori]

The Doormat

With only slick mud
left streaked across its center,
the doormat smiles.

Thoughts?

[Eryc]

I like it and get it in this kinda disturbing way. But now I'm gonna get nit-picky. The last line only has 4 sylables so it isn't technacally a haiku. But really who cares? I say break the rules!

[Lori]

Maybe it's an accent thing, but I pronounce "smile" as two syllables =/

[Chew]

It's nice but I wouldn't rub my feet on it, it needs to be longer. x

Chewthin. x

[DoctorDonnaRose]

I llove this! So much is conveyed with so little. That's the trick of good writing. :)