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Starlight53a
10-02-2010, 01:57 PM
The rhythm of this is a bit weird, at some point I'll record myself rapping it and then put it up here. (If that's okay with you people...) :)
And as I said in the title-thing, trigger-warning. I'm also worried people will get offended, so if you're offended or something, say so!

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Can't eat, won't eat, don't even, wanna eat
Yes I do, no I don't, either way, you know I won't
Even if you force me, yell at me
Scream at me or punish me
'Cause I know, secretly
That you don't care about me
You just want, me to eat
So then, everyone can see
How much better you are than me
And how thin, I can't be
But someday I'll make you see
That I can be amazingly
Strong, thin, clean, empty
Pure and pretty, endlessly
So much better than everybody
With their food and caffeine
Complete retards compared to me
But not yet, not now
Right now I'm just, one of the crowd
Stupidly eating, like a cow
All this food, weighing me down
Even though, I know how
To become as weightless as a cloud
But here I am, a fat bitch
Failure, idiot
Size zero will, never fit
Barely even, size six
I'm more like size infinity
No-one will ever like me
If I keep going, like this
Way too many calories
In all that shit, making me
Look so fat and ugly
I bet all my friends will be
Disgusted when they look at me
And all boys will ever see
Is pounds of fat, smothering me
Forever 'til infinity
Unless I try and break free
Stop eating
Then they'll see
No more fat, but perfect me
Start tomorrow, or today
Make this fatness go away
No more food for me, I say
I don't deserve it anyway
All I deserve now is hate
Hate for ruining people's days
'Cause when they see how fat and lazy
I am, it drives them crazy!
Hopefully, someday, maybe
I'll be thin and I'll stop failing
Like a failure, eating food
Even though I know I should
Starve to death and exercise
Maybe then I'll be alright
--

So... What do you think?? Also, if you can come up with a name for it, tell me, 'cause I can't think of one! :)

Jacklinger
10-02-2010, 03:12 PM
A very bold and unveiled litany. You're very talented. I'm at a loss to recommend a title for it though. What about "Perfection Infection"?

Starlight53a
10-03-2010, 06:25 AM
A very bold and unveiled litany. You're very talented. I'm at a loss to recommend a title for it though. What about "Perfection Infection"?

Thanks! Though I didn't know what litany meant so I Googled it and the main things was: "a very long and boring speech", but I'm assuming you meant it in a good way!
And that sounds like a good title, thanks! :)

Jacklinger
10-03-2010, 09:44 AM
WTF? They changed the definition of litany on me. It's supposed to mean eloquent, and captivating I thought. huh?

I just looked it up -- here's the definition I meant: a recitation or recital.

That's what I meant! XD

brittybabi
10-03-2010, 10:48 AM
this is awesome. Jack's right you are very talented :] <3 write summoree!

electricliving
10-03-2010, 02:11 PM
sososososo good alice :)
it has a great rhythm.... I can just hear it in song form, which is great.
i love your talent. never stop writing! (:

citrous
10-05-2010, 09:23 PM
WOW. This is amazing.

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